As a matter of fact, I AM writing a book

[GopherDaGold]

I'm trying to write a kids book as viewed from the eyes of a teen girl, (my daughter) and it's tough! I didn't realize how difficult it is to keep my own perspective out of it while keeping it interesting for the age group it's intended for. With that in mind, I am posting the first of the three pages I have written. Your opinion matters. Be cruel, but be honest.
I may post the other pages if the reviews are good. Storyline and plot will not be revealed yet but rest assured, no vampires.



It wasn't the first time she'd heard the threat and it certainly wouldn't

be the last. "I'll find that dog a new home, I swear I will!" The words echoed in

Sami's head as she grudgingly spun a dozen paper towels from their resting

place on the kitchen wall. "This must be what old people mean by 'broken

record', whatever a record is", she smugly thought. Her trusty companion, a

four year old Basset Hound named Chloe had left a stinky pile on the hallway

carpet again and dad was none too pleased about it. Sure, Chloe was

housebroken and usually did a very good job outside but with her three best

friends over earlier and two of them spending the night later, taking the dog out

dropped a few spaces on her 'to do' list. There were movies to rent, popcorn and

soft drinks to prepare, cell phone and mp3 player to charge... the list was endless.

Besides, dad was just outside cutting the grass, why couldn't HE let her out?

As she surveyed the mess on the carpet, Sami hoped the wad of paper

towels would provide enough of a barrier so that Chloe's latest offering wouldn't

make contact with her fingernails. After all, they were scheduled to be painted

later that evening, just after 'A Nightmare on Elm Street'. She shuddered a

bit at the sheer grossness of the sight before her but as she began to clean up

the mess, the 'eeewwww, nasty' feeling was replaced by a slight twinge of

remorse for getting so off track and forcing Chloe to relieve herself on the

floor.

For about two seconds.


(that's it for now)

[Cappy Z.]

If you want to be rich..do what rich people do...If you want to be a writer...do what writers do...they READ..

I suggest you go and read and re-read and re-read To Kill a Mockingbird.....by Harper Lee. And then discuss it with your daughter...the book is written through the eyes of a young girl.

Good Luck.
Cap Z.

[GopherDaGold]

I never knew that and I think I will.

[Shortstack]

Didn't Miss Jane Austin write her early books through her own eyes as a young girl/woman??
How about the diary written by Anne Franks?

[GopherDaGold]

I don't know but I'm sure mine has never heard of her,

[Cappy Z.]

You might want to consider co writing a book with your daughter. And let her be the 'lead' writer. It would make a great memory for the both of you. Of course you also can write another book on your own.

[spartacus53]

You might want to consider co writing a book with your daughter. And let her be the 'lead' writer. It would make a great memory for the both of you. Of course you also can write another book on your own.

Or, you can buy one of my books, slap your name on it and shop it around